Mystical Angels

Will you read my poem please?

A Major Arcana for you JUSTICE A sound, blink, smile. Words collide, dizzying blur, Ifindthedefendantguilty... on all charges. And for the moment, a victim finds a peace. And for the moment, all's well within the world.

Public Comments

1. Funny. And Short? Meh I don't mind taking the time before school to read poetry...Could you take time to read some of mine?..Sorry i forgot where i was going with that... <.< >.>
2. good poem. really cool. heh. creative too. =]]
3. I do like this poem. I have one suggestion. I think you build up the feeling of suspense and momentum a little bit more before the line "Ifindthedefendantguilty", the poem would be more powerful. You somewhat do this, but not quite enough (in my opinion).
4. On my first reading, i didn't get what you were trying to achieve by jumbling all the words together in line 6. However, on another glance, i noticed the previous line is "dizzying blur". Then, i notice also that the line before that is about words colliding. So if the line 6 was an attempt to make your readers dizzying blur by the means of colliding the words altogether, then you made a very good job. That is my assumption of your intention. "On all charges" has also been brilliantly put as a limelight...perhaps to give it a greater emphasis or to make it a turning point in this poem? Those are just my evaluation or assumption on the motives behind your choice of style. Whatever it is, from my perspective...it is indeed a highly creative piece! A mind-boggling one!
5. The poem is actually well written at first on line 6 i got confused since the words were all mixed together but then i saw the words collide and dizzying blur really good poem=)
6. I like the poem. It is well written and a nice read. However, I don't agree witht he thought of the poem. Just because some one frinds the criminal guilty does not mean that the victim finds peace. I can't say I would.
7. peace always lives from within. thats when you know,see, hear, or feel it. all those words collided together....
8. I agree with Trek. That last two lines conflict with life. The rest of it? Short, sweet, to the point and creative...