Mystical Angels

ATTENTION ALL ANIME/MANGA FANS i am going to write a manga and i want to know if this plot will be cool.?

Akiyoshi(15) and Jaylyne(14) are sisters that have just graduated highschool. jaylyne is a proffesional dancer/singer/and actress in hollywood california. Akiyoshi is Jaylyne's co-worker in almost everyhting. But Akiyoshi is adopted not knowing of her past. one day as they were planning to go to a production meeting. they have a spring in their backyard (that had been frozen for over 550 years). they accidently somehow brake the ice and fall into the water. they notice they don't get wet but instead feel like they go through a time swirl. they both noticed when they fell down they were rising up as if the spring had flipped sides. they get out .Jaylyne has a really hyper cool attitude and says they are absoultly not in kansas(when she realizes her blackberry doesn't get a signal )Akiyoshi reconizes that they have come out of the spring and says the spring looks like the one's back in fedual japan(which by the way was correct) as they wonder around they see a mysterious figure that seems to take the figure of a human but frozen. Eventually in a tight situation Akiyoshi revives the figure which was indeed a half-demon boy(sorry haven't thought of a name for him,but he's 17 which would be 306 in demon years) they eventually figure out they have to resolve an ancient codex of the crystal spheres of:Water Wind Earth Fire and Void together with companions of a princess that has trained as a fighter.And a blind samurai with extrodinary skill . And Akiyoshi finds out she is the reincarnation of the half-demon boy's mother who was a externely powerfull preistess. But Akiyoshi also has the rare powers of psychic. What do u think people? good plot?

Public Comments

1. I really like it but it remains me of little bit of inuyasha it kinda sounds like thats where you got the idea from well if it is then my only advice would be to not make it to similar or to similar to any other shows you may of get the idea from
2. I didn't read the whole summary but it seem like your on your way, but i have to say some of the stuff in ur plot i think i've heard before
3. if u like it, so be it. (not so kind huh?)
4. owow that sounds pretty awesome. and seriously where did you get those ideas? but one thing; they are 15 and 14? o__o would you like graduate highschool as 17/18 also i think i would be more interested if they were in highschool and jaylyne was like aspiring for those things and instead of going to the meeting she is going to an audition and akiyoshi goes with her to comfort her. (just my point of view)
5. O_O this sounds kinda lyk inuyasha..... but yh, i think its pretty gud maybe you could change sum bits of it to make it more interesting and less lyk inuyasha? =S just my opinion...
6. um..... well i think the plot sound okay... not anything great the whole half demon thing and accidently going back in time to feudal japan and her being a priestess is realllllllllllllllyyy close to inuyasha... i think most hardcore inuyasha fans would take that offensively and call that a rip off... (i'm just saying this because when i showed this to like 6 of my friends and asked their opinion they said it was and inuyasha rip off... sorry) i think the plot is really a bit cliche though... plus if you plan on making a MANGA i would suggest you choose japanese names for the characters... its sorta strange that one sister has and american name and the other doesn't... (I like the name sumire, it means violet) (p.s. Sumire is pronounced Soo-Mee-Ray) (or tsuzuki)(it means "to continue") and where does Jaylyne go? does she die in the swirly water thing or does she just fall away as a character? (personally i think that when major characters just fall of or go away or die is stupid, sorry) OOHH!!! IT WOULD BE AWESOME IF JAYLYNE WENT ON THE DARK SIDE AND LIKE BECOME EVIL TO SPITE HER SISTER!!!! yeah but just adjust the plot and change the girls name and it would be awesome! i would soooo read that.... edit: oh yeah... you don't graduate high school when your 14/15... not even in japan (trust me, i've actually been to school in japan)